I certainly wouldn't mind giving it a read and providing you with feedback - if you don't mind hearing an honest and detailed answer (not just of the content but of the delivery).
If you have the sections online (Google docs or some hosting website) you can PM me a link. If you would rather send a document you can PM me and I can give you an email address to send it to.
PS. I am a voracious reader, my personal library consists of over 2000 volumes - predominantly science fiction. I do write book reviews for the website I use for cataloging my library (LibraryThing) which are generally well received by other readers (if not necessarily by the author).
Me: poly bi female, in an "open-but-not-looking" Vee-plus with -
MrS: hetero male, live-in husband (together 21 years, married 17)
Dude: hetero poly male, live-in boyfriend (together 2.5 years) and MrS's best friend (for several years longer than that)
Lotus: poly bi female, dating Dude; married to TT, poly male
VV and MsJ: bi-women with male primaries, LTR LDR FWBs to JaneQ
My poly blogs on this site:
The Journey of JaneQSmythe
The Notebook of JaneQSmythe