I gotta say that was some pretty hot stuff... You are a talented writer and it sounds like you have a good thing going. I showed this to my primary and she (who isn't yet interested in having both of us simultaneously) thought it was pretty stimulating.
Aside from the lusty side I LOVE the way you describe cunnilingus. It's poetic. The looking into each others eyes, beds breaking, and the nutella story all make it so personal. You really put a lot of yourself out there.